How is my rough draft of my story?

First off, I really like the title of it! If this were on a book shelf, I would gravitate to it just because the title is eye-catching. Enough about the title though, there's some tweaking that needs to be done. When there is conversation going on, you don't need to reiterate who is speaking after each line. By the first few lines, the reader should be able to catch on to who's speaking and that no new character has been added to the mix. Actually, there's not much else that needs to be fixed. You have a lovely start! Keep up the good work. :)